RE: Two serial killers struggle to curb their appetites for carnage while avoiding each other’s path and dodging the law.

Euhommie Penpusher Asked on January 2, 2016 in Thriller.

The good guy is actually a female police detective. She’s a loud-mouth functioning alcoholic; middle-age detective. She’s the embarrassment of the entire police department.  My characterization of her is: Archie Bunker meets Donald Trump.

on January 3, 2016.
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Not only is there no obvious good guy, there are two ostensible villains.  Whom is the audience supposed to identify/empathize with?  The lack of a character in the logline that the audience would naturally root for makes it a tough concept to sell.

Well, if that’s the story you want to tell, I  would hope that it’s more than a slasher-basher story, that what the logline lacks in immediate character appeal is more than compensated for in the script by a  probing dramatization of the psychopathology.

And if that’s the way you want to go, then I suggest a modest tweak to the logline:

Two serial killers struggle to curb their compulsion to kill while avoiding each other’s path and dodging the law.

dpg Singularity Reviewed on January 3, 2016.

Thanks for the feedback. Much appreciated!

on January 3, 2016.
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