A distrusting psychic interrogator, who steals information by entering a suspect’s mind, becomes infected by a recent suspect’s consciousness and must team up with his inner demons to stop his mind being taking over .
What starts him off to team up with his inner demon? What is the inciting incident?
Also what is a psychic interrogator? Is this a real job or made up in the world of the story?
Lastly it is a bit confusing that he needs to prevent the terrorist from reclaiming stolen secretes from his own mind.
Perhaps simplify this and say he has to stop the terrorist form gaining national security secrets?
Hope this helps.
When a devious psychic who steals secrets from other people’s minds realizes another psychic is trying to steal from his, he must… he must…
Well, what must he do? Repel the intruder, yes. But what’s at stake? What does he stand to lose if he fails? What’s the big secret at risk?
This one is really interesting! Your logline gives an idea of what the psychic must do (“team up with inner demons”), but could be a bit more specific. A simple re-word gives this-
A distrusting psychic interrogator that steals information directly from suspects’ minds must team up with his inner demons to stop a fragment of his latest suspect’s consciousness from taking over his own mind.
It is still lacking a bit in specificity, as dpg alludes to above. But I do think I get a feel for the movie- sort of a ‘The Cell’ type movie with really cool set pieces that take place in the protag’s mind?
I’m not 100% convinced ‘distrusting’ is the best adjective, but I’m not sure what else could be used. Jaded? Disillusioned?
I guess my reason to say he is distrusting is because of the irony that someone who knows all your secrets can’t trust anyone almost he’s reached a point where he no longer can accept people for who they are he has to know it all we all have something to hide and in top of that he’s the one burying the most.
Also, the other reason I went with distrusting is because he’s learnt so many secrets he has almost developed an addiction for them, like he always thinks people are hiding more and more no matter how deep into a suspect’s mind he goes, this of course relates to him and how his own guilt and secrets are eating away at him as he has never confronted them.
Hope that helps.