A group of high school misfits desperately try to get the recognition of a famous superhero by filming themselves becoming vigilantes in their own small town.

Admiral Hawk

MistourJ Penpusher Asked on September 6, 2015 in Public.
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I agree with DPG but it still is a really good start. They could even be younger and then the superhero doesn’t have to be real. Just someone on TV.  This could make a really good kids movie like Son of Rambo.

Clint Cure Penpusher Reviewed on October 21, 2015.
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Whose the alpha character of the group? IOW: who is the main character?

What’s the nature of the “recognition” they want from a famous superhero. What does this “recognition” look like, what is the specific visual benchmark that let’s the audience know they’ve succeeded (or failed)?

And who stands in the way from the main character (and his group)from achieving the goal? Who or what opposes them?

And what’s at stake? Why MUST they have this thing called “recognition”?

dpg Singularity Reviewed on September 7, 2015.
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Agreed with DPG.

Also, what motivates the main characters? Why must they now get the recognition be it what it may?

What is their inciting incident?

The answers to these questions should be clear in the logline.

Hope this helps.

Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on September 7, 2015.
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