In a last-ditch effort to get rid of her eye sore car, a paranoid business woman risks being mugged in a particularly shady part of town by an unknown and potentially dangerous buyer.
It’s a plan, not a plot. Might start with: ‘when she is mugged while selling her eyesore car in a shady part of town and left without money or identity, a paranoid businesswoman must reshape her whole life and find out who her real friends are.
The logline suggests a concept — but not a plot. And loglines are about the plot, a specific course of action. “Redefines her understanding of success and life’s purpose” is vague and indeterminate. What’s the visual on “success and life’s purpose”? Which is to say, how will the audience know from looking at the screen whether she has succeeded or failed?
As a result of meeting the college student, what becomes her objective goal?
Who/what opposes her struggle for that goal?
What is the character flaw that she must overcome to achieve her goal?
What are the stakes, that is what does she stand to gain if she succeeds, lose if she fails?
A jaded, wealthy business women redefines her understanding of success and life’s purpose when selling her eye sore car to a broke, yet optimistic college student. In order to find happiness, she must let go of her job and the sense of security it brings to embrace the uncertainty of the exciting unknown.
Probably need a stronger goal than just ‘find happiness’ though.