A Janitor suffering from aquaphobia discovers he has the ability to control water. He must conquer his fear to save his fiance from a malevolent man who wants to see the world burn.

Horn of the leviathan

Andrew Bates Penpusher Asked on August 29, 2012 in Public.
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Hydrophobia

CraigBerger Default Reviewed on August 29, 2012.
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Hydrophobia (Rabies) – especially a set of symptoms of the later stages of an infection, in which the victim has difficulty swallowing, shows panic when presented with liquids to drink, and cannot quench their thirst.

An abnormal or unnatural dread of water.

Aquaphobia is a persistent and abnormal fear of water. Aquaphobia is a specific phobia that involves a level of fear that is beyond the patient’s control or that may interfere with daily life.

either one covers the phobia.

Andrew Bates Penpusher Reviewed on August 29, 2012.
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I stand corrected.

CraigBerger Default Reviewed on August 29, 2012.
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I think you start off with an interesting idea – a janitor with aquaphobia – but maybe you could push that a little further. Like what if he’s a pool maintenance man who suddenly becomes aquaphobic? But then it gets too general: ‘A malevolent man who wants to see the world burn’ is too vague and could possibly be any psychopath. Can you narrow the idea down and give us more of a sense of the what the main action of the story is going to be? Good start, keep going with it!

holhuds Default Reviewed on August 29, 2012.
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While I love the idea of an “everyman superhero” with a phobia for his own power, I have to agree with holhuds – we kind of need a more specific villain. Otherwise, I quite like this one.

Eshbaal Default Reviewed on August 29, 2012.
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