When two personalities, a meek family man and a violent assassin, become aware they’re sharing the same mind and body, they work together to find the organisation that created them, but they’re both secretly planning to have the other erased to survive.

Knightrider Mentor Asked on October 15, 2015 in Thriller.
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Sounds cool!

What’s the goal though? From this logline, I have no idea what the main character wants. Is it to get back to his family? Then write that in the logline. And what must he do to get back? Fight of this alternate personality of his (fight himself basically).

I feel like the logline only discribes the first act of the film, that the inciting incident is when he finds out his kidnapper isn’t real. What happens next?

Hope this helped! 🙂

StellaAurora Logliner Reviewed on October 16, 2015.

I have updated the logline might be too long but I hope that helps

on October 16, 2015.
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