A member of a vigilantly cop network must escape custody and get to the feds before he is killed by his own network after he arrested for carrying out vigilantly justice for the group.
Richiev’s version is an improvement and he’s right: the inciting incident should kick off the logline.
But…. why would I be root for a corrupt cop who seems only interested in saving his gluteus maximus? Who has it coming to him. As the common saying in police work goes “what goes around comes around”: life pays back in kind; what you do unto others eventually gets done unto you.
What is the hook of this story, the core concept? Is it about a corrupt cop administering “street justice”? Or is it about a corrupt cop belonging to a secret cabal of cops, a modern-day star chamber, executing “street justice” because they are frustrated with the failure to get legal justice in the courts?
It is hard to get the entire scheme in the line. Each cop does revenge for other cops so it can’t be traced back. There is a fanatic in the group who has become the de facto leader. When the MC is caught he makes the call to have him killed. This fanatic sees the vengeance as all important.
The MC is willing to go to gaol but the leader isn’t willing to risk it.
There is a slight split in the group and that is how the MC gets the tip off. He decides the Feds are his only choice. Think of a collective of Dexters.