A self confident hitman relives along a nightmarish night the killing of his last victim.

Jean-Marie Mazaleyrat Samurai Asked on September 28, 2015 in Horror.
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Hello, I think you just have an initial situation – you should focus on the main action of the movie.
“When his last victim appears to him in a nightmare, a self confident hitman must…”  then what happens ?

FFF Mentor Reviewed on September 29, 2015.

Sorry but you’re wrong, he relives in a nightmarish “reality” the killing of is last victim, all along a 100minutes movie.

Maybe this could be better?
“A self confident hitman relives along a nightmarish night the killing of his last victim.”

on September 29, 2015.

I mean from the moment he is given the identity of his victim to the moment he finally kills her, and a moment later…

on September 29, 2015.
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Who is the antagonist? What is his goal? Why is he reliving his last kill?

priggy Logliner Reviewed on September 28, 2015.

It seems like this is a story driven  plot mhhhh?

on September 29, 2015.
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Hello,
I don’t understand what you mean by “relives”.
“To undergo or experience again, especially in the imagination”.

I can’t imagine what the movie will be about… twice the same killing in the same way? In the reality?
I’m confused. Or are you trying to say that the movie starts with the man who have killed his victim and ‘remember’ all he did? If this is the case you should build the logline telling what happened instead of explaining the design principle of the movie.

Anyway, even the ‘story driven’ movies have well defined characters, goals, antagonists.

I heard good things about “schneider vs bax” where a “easy” contract becomes tragically(comically) “hard”.

“On his birthday, a hitman reluctantly takes on the easy task of killing a writer, only to find the job a lot more difficult than expected”. (from imdb – this is a teasing logline not a perfect working logline)

FFF Mentor Reviewed on September 30, 2015.
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Hello FFF,

I thought that  –“reality” –  would means something more subjective than – reality – mostly if placed after – nightmarish – . However,  “reality” is not in the logline.

I don’t understand  why you “don’t understand what you mean by “relives”“, as you give the best definition of this: “To undergo or experience again, especially in the imagination”. I thought this were clear enough.

Who’s the antagonist? maybe himself, maybe the story (“the plot is a conspiracy against the hero”), maybe something else…

Jean-Marie Mazaleyrat Samurai Reviewed on September 30, 2015.
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