A shy courier is overheard on police phone taps manned by his brother in law when he pursues a romance with the girlfriend of a wanted criminal.

Wayne Samurai Asked on December 1, 2015 in Drama.
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This only describes a situation.

Rutger Oosterhoff Samurai Reviewed on December 1, 2015.
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As Rutger said.  The logline sets up a situation for a plot but it does not fulfill the primary purpose of a logline which is to succinctly describe a plot.  In this case, the logline needs to clearly indicate who is the protagonist.  Is it the shy courier or is it his brother-in-law?  Whoever it is, what becomes the objective goal as a consequence of the electronic eavesdropping?  Who/what opposes the protagonist in his struggle to achieve his objective goal?  What’s at stake?

dpg Singularity Reviewed on December 1, 2015.
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