A spoiled teen is sent to live with her Grandfather who is the storyteller for his tribe; will she have the worst summer of her life or will she relent and learn about her heritage.

    Heritage

    Richiev Singularity Asked on September 26, 2012 in Public.
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      Sounds like a great drama. Touching story of lost youth and culture. It would be fun to write, read, and watch.

      Judah Ray Samurai Reviewed on February 1, 2017.
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        Cool title. Loglines shouldn’t sound like ad campiagns, and when you form it as a question, the first reaction is going to be “Who cares?”, or “No”, not “Ooh, let’s read it and find out. Rhetorical questions almost never work.

        That being said, you need to ratchet up the conflict. Not having a great summer is hardly a consequence she might have if she doesn’t learn about her heritage. Think about ways in which not knowing can hurt her- either physically, emotionally or otherwise: she could have a disease that has been passed down through the family, and not know about it, she could be missing out on Indian casino shares she’s not aware of, she could discover who her real father was, etc.

        Sounds like a good concept, so don’t cheat yourself with a less-than-perfect logline.

        sharkeatingman Default Reviewed on September 27, 2012.
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          Geno Scala (sharkeatingman)- judge

          sharkeatingman Default Reviewed on September 27, 2012.
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            Wow Geno, you keep getting in before me.

            I imagine the stakes must be bigger than just her. So much of the future of tribes rests on the current generation learning about their heritage. If the grandfather must teach her the ways of her people or else the tribe will fall apart forever, then you have instantly set up the conflict that will drive the film.

            Being Australian, this kind of thing is happening before our eyes. Hundreds of languages have been lost in less than a century.

            ChasFisher Default Reviewed on September 29, 2012.
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