After a land survey reveals that her fence is in the wrong place, a homeowner, unwilling to lose part of her backyard, wages war against her neighbor – no matter what the law says.

Property Line

jcs Penpusher Asked on August 29, 2015 in Public.
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I see the problem here. Maybe there should not be proof of law, and the act could have gone on unapproved at the time. That would give her two reasons to fight.
How about:
A generous neighbor replaces a downed fence when a homeowner is gone, but instead of following the original fence line, he angles the new fence line to go around a tree, thus stealing inches of property from the homeowner – inches she wants back. A war is waged and the whole neighborhood will pay.

t9ejane Penpusher Reviewed on April 28, 2016.
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My issue with this logline is that it sounds far too mundane and normal. Also, the main character is in the wrong (the law says) but their desire to pursue the matter makes them seem unreasonable and someone I would struggle to emphasise with. I dont have to like them but I need something to hang on to such as empathy.

Just thinking out loud – maybe our main character is an accident prone soccermom who accidentally kills her neighbour during a dispute and the victim turns out to be the brother of a notorious crime boss.

See what I mean about adding a hook to make it seem more interesting and exciting?

typingfilms Penpusher Reviewed on August 29, 2015.
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What’s the genre, comedy?

dpg Singularity Reviewed on August 29, 2015.
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Drama.

jcs Penpusher Reviewed on August 29, 2015.
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Seems like a natural for a comedy, a dark one perhaps, but still a comedy of human folly.

dpg Singularity Reviewed on August 29, 2015.
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