what is a Grimm secret? I would cut this sentence since “learning a Grimm ancestral secret” means nothing for the reader (it means nothing for me).
This premise has much potential.
Best to remove “…while investigating who stalks her.” because this is a secondary goal which subsequently dilutes the primary goal of hunting the Werewolf.
Hope this helps.
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