After the Grim Reaper has guided countless people to the Afterlife, a suitable replacement must don the cowl, so Death can finally rest in peace.

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Andrew Bates Penpusher Asked on December 14, 2015 in Drama.
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Who’s the bad guy (protag.) here?

Rutger Oosterhoff Samurai Reviewed on December 15, 2015.
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Who is the protagonist — the Grim Guy or an unnamed entity who must find a replacement?  What’s the inciting incident – – what sets up the need to replace him now?  What’s at stake if no replacement is found?

As written, there’s raw material for a skeleton of a sketch, but it needs to be fleshed out.

fwiw

dpg Singularity Reviewed on December 15, 2015.
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This is a good setting but it doesn’t describe the story conflicts.

Is the new person happy about the job?
Does he have to die?
Does the GR want to retire?

All that can and must be in the story. Not your story, but here is an example

“The Grim Reaper must convince a father to leaves his family and become the reaper’s replacement”

CraigDGriffiths Overlord Reviewed on December 15, 2015.
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Thank you all for the helpful feedback.
I noticed no I.I after I posted the Logline.

The Protagonist is = Death
Antagonist is = Time

Here is an update
“After a mass shooting the Grim Reaper decides to hang up the cowl, he must convince an ill man to be his replacement so Death can find peace”

Still needs work, but thank-you for pointing me in the right direction

Andrew Bates Penpusher Reviewed on December 15, 2015.
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This feels like a common concept so it needs some sort of twist.

Like the only eligible person is a professional skeptic.

tradingdavid Penpusher Reviewed on December 15, 2015.
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