An ambitious woman takes over her uncle’s struggling restaurant, determined to bring the business back to life. When the staff that don’t meet Wendy’s standards begin to disappear, the remaining employees start to question just how dedicated to her job their new manager might be. You’d better hope you’re on next week’s roster.
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It’s not clear in my mind as to what the plot of this story is. Are employees not just being terminated–fired–they’re being “terminated with extreme prejudice” — killed?
If that is in fact, the premise of the story, then I presume the “ambitious woman” is the culprit, or at least the suspected culprit, ergo, the antagonist. So who is the good guy or gal — the protagonist? Who must solve the mystery, stop the murders?
If Wendy is killing innocent people, she becomes a negative character. If there are two other main characters trying to stop the killing, or figure out what is happening to their co workers, they are positive characters.
The audience will find it hard to empathize with a negative character and easy to empathize with the positive ones. I suspect your plot would also be more interesting with an element of mystery introduced by the fact the main characters don’t know what is actually happening.
Perhaps best to re draft the logline from the point of view of the character or characters that are trying to stop the killer.
Hope this helps.