An Empress too pacific to take a stand allows the relationship with her neighbors countries turn sour, while one of them demands more resources from her country and she refuses, war breaks out between them.

Vania Berruecos Penpusher Asked on October 1, 2015 in Action.
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Hello, I can’t picture the movie… I assume this is not a war movie, It seems more a film about diplomacy, a biopic about an Empress: in this case I’d like to have a better understanding of the character – I think this kind of movie works better when it’s an historical character- but she doesn’t have to be. Maybe you can be more specific about the country and period if it matters for the story.

FFF Mentor Reviewed on October 1, 2015.

Not a war movie, but if you can’t picture it then I’m doing it all wrong :O
Not a biopic either, and both the setting and time are made up…
It’s an action movie, like LOTR
Does that help? Got worse?
Man I’ll rewrite the whole thing!! Thanks 😉

on October 2, 2015.
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What kind of world are we in?  I think that’s important to know up front because use of the word Empress lets me know we’re not in current times.
My initial thought was that it might be worded better like: Despite her good intentions, a weak-willed Empress allows war to break out… (because the word pacific is not generally used this way in my experience.)
It’s important that we know what she must now do as a result of this if she is truly the protagonist.  And is there an antagonist on the other side?  Right now it looks like the antagonist is another entire country.

sloanpeterson Samurai Reviewed on October 2, 2015.

Sure, describe the world first! Noted!

Uhm… English isn’t my native language so, how is “pacific” generally used? She’s not “weak willed” either it’s more like “this isn’t happening as long and I don’t acknowledge it”

The antagonist is a King and his country

Better?

And thank you!

on October 2, 2015.
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Too pacific = too weak.  Well, a character can start out that way, but the logline should indicate a  plot line that forces her to grow,  to become stronger, a more assertive — and more savvy — leader of her country.  “She refuses”  is a start, but  just saying “No” isn’t enough.  Then what happens?  After war breaks out, what must she do?

And is this based on an actual historic personage?  Or is it pure fiction?

dpg Singularity Reviewed on October 2, 2015.

Sure, she becomes the leader her country needs, that should be in the logline,  and yes its pure fiction.
Thank you!

on October 2, 2015.
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