David is found dead in the city’s reservoir and police rule it an accident. While investigating his best friend’s death, street-smart Sam discovers David had fingers in many pies and, as he was in jail at the time, Sam soon realizes he is the only person who didn’t have an opportunity – or, apparently, a motive – to kill him.

Alex Cassun Penpusher Asked on November 25, 2015 in Noir.
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And then what?  The logline sets up a situation for a plot, but it  doesn’t seem to  spell out a plot .

As a result of what Sam discovers , what becomes his objective goal? What must he do about his friend’s death? Who opposes him?  What’s at stake?

And I suggest reviewing the logic of the premise.  If  the death has been declared an accident, then, the police wouldn’t be look for murder suspects.  And if the police aren’t looking for suspects, then Sam having an ironclad alibi is irrelevant — he wouldn’t be a suspect.

Finally, it’s not necessary to name characters in a logline.  What matters is not the name of the characters — but their roles,

dpg Singularity Reviewed on November 25, 2015.

Great insight, thank you. The only reason for naming characters was to avoid confusion between the characters, but I’ll take another stab at it.

on November 25, 2015.

Hello,
check the tutorial page:
http://logline.it/howto/

on December 1, 2015.
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