Draft2: The Rough-Cut! A ‘Thrill-Thirsty’ son learns ‘Knowledge is a double-edged sword’ & promises to wield it wisely, after crossing roads with his Dad (a Celebrated-Police-Officer!). But the son is on the ‘Other-Side’ of the Law already. The Dad is not sure whom he must protect: The LAW of the Corrupt-Politicians or his SON who has taken their bait!?

gokulthedreamer Penpusher Asked on December 10, 2015 in Drama.
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Is this the father’s story or the son’s story?  The father’s story is strong – he has a difficult decision to make, and that can drive the action.  The son’s story is a little unclear to me – is he just naive and fell in with the wrong crowd, or is he obsessed with something that lead him to go down this path?

TheBear Logliner Reviewed on December 11, 2015.
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First-Stop…Thanks!!!

Now to answer u… It is  the Fathers story. But yeah, u r right, i need to make it clear in the log-line too… 🙂

Cheers!

gokulthedreamer Penpusher Reviewed on December 11, 2015.
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Sorry to start so negative. “Be specific”, double edged sword, etc tells me nothing.  I have no idea until the end of what the story is, then it is only a hint.

what big thing must Dad have to do?  What must he do? If it is just decide who to protect, the story will be short.  If it is just that, what does he have to go through to make that decision?

This is my take, it is probably not your story.

“A cop must find a way to bring down corrupt officials while protecting his son involved in their actions” or

“A cop discovers that an investigation into corrupt officials will involve his son.  He must become as corrupt as them  to protect his son”

CraigDGriffiths Mentor Reviewed on December 13, 2015.
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Currently I’m thinking the son might be involved in street racing or something kinda morally arguable. It’s unclear why a cop would really feel divided about protecting his son or enforcing the law. Maybe if his son killed someone hurt someone.

tradingdavid Penpusher Reviewed on December 15, 2015.
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