When a troubled American expatriate is offered work at the Tengen Hotel, he soon discovers that Tokyo’s most exclusive hotel is also the base of operations for a major crime syndicate. Now embroiled in their conspiracy to appropriate control over the city, the expatriate must choose between duty or sentiment as both his mettle and loyalty are put to the test.
I’ll be honest enough to say I don’t know what a dispora is. And I’m a writer. But I can tell from the rest of the logline what kind of story this is. I just don’t have enough of a handle on what he must do in order to prove his loyalty and maybe need a hint as to why. Are they going to kill him? Kill his girlfriend etc.?
Embroiled in a conspiracy, (Be specific, what conspiracy) an American x-diaspora-x (not sure if this is the correct word) x-with a turbulent past-x (Don’t need to tell us this in the logline) must prove his loyalty to a major Japanese crime syndicate (By doing this).
How about something like this: (your’s will be different of course)
“Embroiled in a conspiracy to take down the stock market, a troubled American ex-patriot must prove his loyalty to the Yakuza by killing the head of the national bank; his former mentor.”