For 10 years this man has been having accurate visions of events seven days into the future. Last night he saw his own murder at the hands of a woman he doesn't know.

    A Week

    CraigDGriffiths Overlord Asked on February 19, 2015 in Public.
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      The hook about this is a man seeing his own murderer so I think perhaps best to start with that as an inciting incident. The first sentence in this logline feels redundant because the “…I see the future…, …I see dead people…, …I see murders…” super natural element is well established as a trope in film and TV. Also the exact nature of the mechanism by which the man sees the future is unrelated to the plot at hand of him stopping the killer.

      Here is my try:
      After a clairvoyant is given a vision of his own murder he has a week to find and stop the killer.

      Better to add in some character descriptions for the antagonist and MC but none are in the current draft of the logline and as the above example is very lean there is plenty of room to add words.

      Hope this helps.

      Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on February 19, 2015.
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        Seems to be a similar existential dilemma as faced the protagonist in the “Minority Report” except, of course, it is not the protagonist who has the pre-vision.

        What has the protagonist been doing for 10 years about his pre-visions?

        Now, that his pre-vision is all about him, what must he do differently?

        dpg Singularity Reviewed on February 19, 2015.
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          The concept I had. Was that he had been having these since he was a child. He was never able to alter the event. However, he was able to manipulate everything else to take advantage of the event he saw. Lets say a car accident, so he takes out income protection insurance.

          He knows this is coming, what can he do? Minority report… dam. Didn’t even cross my mind. Can’t have the character run. Tom does some great running.

          CraigDGriffiths Overlord Reviewed on February 19, 2015.
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            Nir,

            I was trying to avoid the question, “Why not Just get on a plane and fly to the Arctic?”. Hence underlining the point of accurate. Perhaps I should find a way of getting the “unchangeable” nature of his visions.

            CraigDGriffiths Overlord Reviewed on February 19, 2015.
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