In a future where babies are no longer born, a black market dealer of artificial wombs must find his baby daughter when competitors take the womb and sell it to the highest bidder. (For #meetup)

Ectogenesis

andrewclau Logliner Asked on January 23, 2015 in Public.
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As a setting isn’t really required for a logline, I’d probably lose the firstline of this and start from “a black market dealer”.

Something like “a black market dealer of artificial wombs must (do something in order to) find his unborn daughter when competitors take the womb and sell it to the highest bidder” and then work from there.

Mentioning what he needs to do in order to achieve his goal can sometimes be good for a logline like this one.

Lucius Paisley Logliner Reviewed on January 27, 2015.
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wow, i want to watch this film.

while i agree that the setting isn’t necessary, what the first line does for me is give me genre and give me stakes.

without “babies are no longer born” then the goal of needing to find “his baby daughter” is weaker and less urgent.

with this first line the stakes are clearer and the arc is stronger.

blublkgal Default Reviewed on February 22, 2015.
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