In a future where criminals are punished with instant aging, when a young ex-convict -turned 70- learns about a place where his youth can be restored, he has a week to find it before the process becomes irreversible.
This is definitely a great concept, but what would happen after his youth is restored? Would he become a fugitive again? It feels like getting his youth back wouldn’t be the end of the story, but a secondary goal for something bigger (proving his innocence, maybe).
What are the obstacles for the protagonist? I think you need to include in the logline your idea about the experimentation that involves the government. Or at least mention that, in the process of finding the place where his youth can be restored, he’ll put a top secret program that involves the government at risk.
As everyone else, I see great potential in an action film starring a young man imprisoned in an old-man’s body. I would simply link the success of the protagonist (getting his youth back) with the opportunity to prove his innocence. Maybe that’s the countdown’s purpose: he must find the evidences of his innocence before the process becomes irreversible.
In any case, I’d love to see this film!
@dpg: this could interest Schwartzy or Bruce Willis (Looper). Stallone can’t imagine he’s already 70 hahaha!
@ FFF: This has a good potential either for a comedy, a drama, a thriller, a film noir, an action movie… So your genre is not clear hahaha! which is not important at this state.
I love the story concept, it has an ironic hook and it’s clear to see the character’s goal and what’s at stake if he fails. Not sure how it would play on screen though, as you don’t see many action films with a 60 year-old protagonist. Regardless, you have nailed the fundamentals of a great logline…
I, too, am intrigued by the concept but would like some clarification.
So murderers (and only murderers?) are instantly aged. Then what? Does it mean they live out their shortened lifespans in prison? And what’s the rationale for this drawn out punishment rather than quick and dirty capital punishment?
And if people can be instantly aged, why set the penalty at 60? Why not 65 or 70 condemning them to even shorter and more enfeebled lives?
And why should the audience care about, want the protagonist to hold onto to his youth? He’s guilty, has it coming to him…. doesn’t he?