In a world where the police can get a warrant to search your memories, a former cop is implanted with murderous false memories and must find a way to have them removed before he’s caught and his mind read.
I guess if anything it proves the premise can be done well, Star Trek had some fantastic and well done story ideas, so my job would be to do it differently and uniquely enough that I explore new elements that weren’t done in the episode.
if I wrote something half as good as that I’d be happy
I like the first half, then it seems to go off the rails a little and drag on.
“Haunted by a guilty conscience” – is an internal battle and shouldn’t really be put in a logline (but should be in a good story), stick to the external events and stakes.
So I would go with the first half, then add something about how he becomes linked and must solve the case/mystery before the man dies or he’ll die too. (but in fewer words).
It reminds me a lot of MINORITY REPORT, which is a great high-concept idea.