In the final moments before facing the firing squad, the charismatic leader of a murderous robbery gang makes one last request: to have her confession heard by the priest who was once her lover.

    kbfilmworks Samurai Asked on November 2, 2014 in Public.
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      Well, there’s a situation, a setup for the 1st Act. And then what? What’s his game plan? What becomes his objective goal upon the reveal?

      dpg Singularity Reviewed on November 3, 2014.
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        You should focus on the lead character in the logline, the priest or the leader of the gang. (Can’t tell from the logline who’s the lead character)

        Richiev Singularity Reviewed on November 3, 2014.
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          Here is a revised draft addressing your comments.

          kbfilmworks Samurai Reviewed on November 3, 2014.
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            As the previous comments have suggested this logline lacks a clear MC and goal. I would add that it is too long and has far to much detail of the setting and events in the story that don’t really need to be included in the logline.

            Really depends on who is the MC that will determine the re structuring of this loglie.

            Hope this helps.

            Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on November 3, 2014.
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