The dying emperor of a crumbling galactic empire struggles to hold onto power amidst political intrigue and a coming war.

Dark Empire

martinreese Penpusher Asked on March 19, 2013 in Public.
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I do get a sense of stetting and a hint of story from this logline, However It would be good if you told us what he was struggling against. His ambition son? A longtime rival? A galactic insurgency?

Still I really like the idea, good luck with this!

Richiev Singularity Reviewed on March 19, 2013.
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Like Star Wars but from the emperors view !! I LOVE IT

The only suggestion would be to try and be more specific with the struggle as Richiev mentioned..

Happy writing 😀

Tor

Default Reviewed on March 19, 2013.
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Like Star Wars BUT from the Emperors point of view!! I LOVE IT

Tor Dollhouse Default Reviewed on March 19, 2013.
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Your logline just identify the setting – the situation on the beginning and what’s at stakes. But it does not tell a story. Identify an antagonist (not necessarily a person), but there is that missing “so he must – “

JanCabal Default Reviewed on March 20, 2013.
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I will re-post based on the commentaries

martinreese Penpusher Reviewed on March 20, 2013.
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