the seven deadly sins come to earth in human form. Than decide to compete for the soul of a novice priest with his destruction being the ultimate prize.

Evil games

CraigDGriffiths Overlord Asked on June 16, 2015 in Public.
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cool concept, however i would make it clear the novice priest is the protagonist.. “… a novice priest must avoid corruption when the seven deadly sins come to earth in human form and wage for his soul”.

Dario Tinoco Default Reviewed on June 16, 2015.
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He isn’t really. He is a bit like a prize. We see his change, but we aren’t focused on his choices. He doesn’t have any agency in the story. He is a play thing I am hoping we feel sadness for him. But we don’t track his actions.

Thanks for the hint. Not sure how to get my idea a cross clearly.

CraigDGriffiths Overlord Reviewed on June 16, 2015.
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What happens when the competing 7 deadly sins capture the novice priest??
Ultimate prize is not clear enough to the audience.
Spelling mistakes???
Goodluck 🙂

Alexpsmith Penpusher Reviewed on June 16, 2015.
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How about this, Craig:

‘When the seven deadly sins come to earth disguised as humans, they compete for the ultimate trophy – the soul of the world’s most altruistic novice priest.’

Default Reviewed on June 16, 2015.
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Hello, I miss a clear main character – even in “seven samurais” there was a main character

FFF Mentor Reviewed on June 16, 2015.
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