To get the girl of his dreams a timid momma’s boy must team up with the local cat burglar, but her unorthodox methods put more than his love life at risk.
What’s missing is ‘how’ teaming with the cat burglar will win the girl:
“In order to win the girl of his dreams a timid momma’s boy must team with a local cat burglar to steal back his true loves family heirloom that was taken from her by a greedy banker.”
Hope that helped, good luck with this!
I agree. The how/why link between cat burglar and the boy’s love is unclear. Also, how would a timid momma’s boy know who the cat burglar is? If he did, wouldn’t everyone else know?
What I DO like is it sounds like there is a solid narrative arc here to build upon.