Two teens from rival families fall in love… it doesn't go well.

    Romeo and Juliet

    Richiev Singularity Asked on September 15, 2012 in Examples.
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      You both make good points, It does need a little more to it. BTW

      I put this in classics, it is the log line for Romeo and Juliet.

      Richiev Singularity Reviewed on September 15, 2012.
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        Sounds like Romeo and Juliet, but with some setting, and maybe a theme, it could be turned into something different.

        Judah Ray Samurai Reviewed on February 1, 2017.
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          While I very much like the drama of this statement, it leaves me feeling like I want a bit more information. Who are these teens? Why are their families rivals? Why doesn’t it go well?

          brookeschook Default Reviewed on September 15, 2012.
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            I agree with brooke. It comes close to Snyder’s example of the logline “She was the perfect date… until she had a drink” in that it makes you imagine a whole lot that could go on which is great. Maybe it just needs a little context, i.e. what area are the families rivals in? Are they bikies? Mafia? Keeping up with the Jones’ type neighbors? Just a little more information would make a big difference. The mention of a twist of some kind on the old Romeo and Juliet plot might help too. Good start.

            Blue Parrot Default Reviewed on September 15, 2012.
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