Two young men with opposite lives from opposite sides of the world unwittingly exchange destinies as one encounters the other, and the other encounters a vision of God.

RandyG Penpusher Asked on November 4, 2015 in Drama.
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I would sum up this logline in one word – Vague.

The purpose of the logline it so we (or a potential producer, actor, director, etc) can imagine the movie, and hopefully it intrigues them enough to want to find out more. But from this logline we could imagine a thousand different versions of the movie and be none the wiser what yours was supposed to be.

Try including some specifics.

Paul Clarke Samurai Reviewed on November 4, 2015.

Yep, in a word, vague.  The logline needs to be fleshed out with specifics.

on November 5, 2015.
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This concept is confusing due to the lack of a plot and a mix of themes.

Who is the main character? What is their goal? What is the inciting incident?

These questions need to be answered in the next draft of the logline.

Hope this helps.

Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on November 4, 2015.
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Hello,
you can do better if you don’t “explain” the story: try to tell the story instead.

FFF Mentor Reviewed on November 5, 2015.
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My problem with this logline is that I don’t understand what do you mean with “exchange destinies”. For me you need to explain that a little better.

Like it is this logline doesn’t make me interested to know the full story.

bamgomes Logliner Reviewed on November 8, 2015.
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