When a billionaire discovers the Garden of Eden, two Biblical revisionists set out to debunk him, until they learn it might be the fountain of youth.

The Garden

deserthorror Penpusher Asked on September 2, 2015 in Public.
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if it is important there are 2 protagonists, then there’s got to be a conflict between the 2, i think…

“when 2 Biblical scholars┬áinvestigate claims of a true garden of eded, their partnership and their faiths are tested.”

seanamulvihill Logliner Reviewed on December 7, 2015.
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The concept has some interesting dramatic possibilities, but to be nick-picky, there is no mention of a fountain of youth in Genesis. There is a river that is supposed to be the source of 4 rivers including the Tigris and Euphrates (Genesis 2:10-14), so I supposed it could sub (with exposition to reconcile your story with the Biblical account).

And then there is the tree of life, the fruit of which could be appropriated in your story for the same result. And there was also a tree of the knowledge of good and evil. If you’re going exploit the Garden of Eden for dramatic purposes, have you considered using that prop as well? Pose a dramatic polarity of values and choices the protagonist will have to wrestle with. IOW: how far do you want to map the original Biblical account to yours?

Finally, if the billionaire has discovered the Garden of Eden, it seems to me that the least of his problems will be 2 Biblical scholars whose knickers get tied up in a knot as they try to debunk him. The greatest and more urgent problem will be preventing the discovery from going viral — which must be a very real threat — resulting in hordes of humanity descending upon the garden to get a bite or bath of the action.


dpg Singularity Reviewed on September 2, 2015.

Thank you for all these thoughts. They are excellent.

on March 29, 2016.
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So who’s the protagonist here?

mrliteral Penpusher Reviewed on September 2, 2015.
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Agreed with the above.

Assuming it is the Billionaire what is his goal?

Also after the discovery of the garden and the realization that someone is trying to stop him what does he want to achieve?

Hope this helps.

Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on September 2, 2015.
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>>> what is his goal?

This raises a meta question to my demented way of thinking. My initial answer would be that the billionaire has already achieved his primary objective goal, to find the Garden of Eden in Act 1 (or thereabouts). As a result of this event, what becomes the plot of movie?

Consider the character John Hammond, the huckster-developer of “Jurassic Park”. At the start of the movie, he has already achieved his objective goal which is to bring dinosaurs back to life via genetic engineering and create a paleo-park to amuse (and profit from) the masses. The goal he has before him in Act 1 is to take care of a minor detail: he must secure an endorsement from 2 prominent paleontologists before the park can open.

And then the caca hits the fan. The movie becomes not a celebration of his success but a curse of the unintended consequences, of the literal and existential price he (and others) must pay for his hubris.

The arc of the plot of Jurassic Park adheres to the age-old dramatic principles of peripety, reversal of a character’s fortune, and enantiodromia, the swing of the plot pendulum by Act 3 to the opposite of its state in Act 1. To wit, Hammond’s Biggest Dream becomes his Biggest Nightmare. The dramatic gods always punish hubris.

So I would suggest that the goal of the plot of this logline would be the billionaire having to deal with unintended consequences of his initial success. How realizing his Biggest Dream, finding the Garden of Eden, becomes his Biggest Nightmare. How the god of the Bible and the gods of drama punish him for his hubris.(The hubris of meddling in and trying to exploit sacred objects for profane purposes — the plot arc of “Raiders of the Lost Ark” by the way.)

And as it is the logline stops short of spelling out the plot that results from the realization it’s the fountain of youth. What plot follows from that realization?

dpg Singularity Reviewed on September 2, 2015.

I really appreciate all of this insight. ┬áI definitely believe I was coming at this story from the wrong angle. Although i used the wrong shorthand when comparing the garden of eden to a fountain of youth…I did want to imagine the garden as the unsullied place of Adam before sin. That Adam was cast out of the garden and the garden was sealed off by flaming swords. Inside the garden, without sin, Adam and Eve would have presumably lived forever…or at least some interpreters read it that way.

I had not thought of the story in terms of Jurassic Park. I thought of it a bit more like Raiders of the Lost Ark.

I love to see how many ideas have come out of the two sentences. It is giving me renewed vigor to develop the idea further. I back burnered it because I was working on another script that is shooting now.

Your insights have really encouraged me and set me back on track. Thank you so much!

on March 30, 2016.
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