When a commitment-phobic long-haul truckie falls for a city writer online, he must cross more than the Nullarbor to win her heart or lose her to a city slicker.

    Louise Weihart Penpusher Asked on September 25, 2015 in Adventure.
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      Having read the story, this is a great logline.

      However, for non-Australians, the Nullarbor doesn’t say much. Just say “the desert”, or “1,675kms of desert”

      I would also remove “online”, as it sits awkward at  the end of the sentence.

      As it is a romance, or romantic comedy (can you do that?), I believe it would be stronger if you could give the writer a flaw. Even if she is really flawless!! 🙂

      Karel Segers Samurai Reviewed on September 27, 2015.
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