When a entire citys population disappears over night, it's up to the young soldier to find out where and why in order to find his sister again. / Amanda E

Disappear

storyutbildningen Default Asked on September 20, 2013 in Student Loglines.
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Is the goal to find his/her sister, and how long will this goal take to complete?
Perhaps it could be “before another citys population disappears” 🙂
best regards/ Matilda

Matilda94 Default Reviewed on September 20, 2013.
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Hi,

this is an interesting idea. I think your logline needs to reflect the goal of the soldier more.

“When a soldier returns from war and discovers his home town has disappeared, he must uncover the truth in order to find his family before losing them forever”

Suggested title “Lost City”

good luck.

wilsondownunder Default Reviewed on September 21, 2013.
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I should note that the reason I changed it to ‘when he returns from war’ is because it explains how he himself wasn’t lost with the city. If the city disappeared over night – how is it he didn’t go with it?

wilsondownunder Default Reviewed on September 21, 2013.
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