When a father, just diagnosed with depression, learns that his sweetheart has an even more debilitating mental illness, he must evaluate the relationship and learn the importance of their love.

    The Borderline

    Wayne Samurai Asked on August 2, 2015 in Student Loglines.
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      So what actually happens? What actions do the characters take? And who is his “sweetheart”? His daughter, wife, girlfriend? Do we need to know he’s a father, or that he was just diagnosed? Why be vague about this sweetheart’s illness? Why not name it?

      mrliteral Penpusher Reviewed on August 2, 2015.
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        Good points raised above I wont repeat them but add the bellow.

        Better to make the inciting incident a more significant event than that in the original logline. if you want to deal with mental illness then why not have the stakes character (sweetheart) try to commit suicide or do some other dangerous action that relates to her mental illness. This way you will clearly motivate the MC and explain she has a condition of sorts at the same time.

        Hope this helps.

        Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on August 3, 2015.
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          Have started again here:


          Wayne Samurai Reviewed on August 21, 2015.
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