When a german soldier deserts he come across a jewish family and together they try to flee the country while being hunted by german soldiers.

    To be Hunted

    storyutbildningen Default Asked on September 20, 2013 in Student Loglines.
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    Maybe change “german soldiers” to Nazis or Gestapo.

    Default Reviewed on September 20, 2013.
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      Maybe change “german soldier” to Nazis or the Gestapo to define time period and to create a more menacing protagonist.

      kjk11 Default Reviewed on September 20, 2013.
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        First I would say “After” instead of “when”

        Second, this is a pretty solid logline, however if you could give the German soldier a ticking clock. Maybe a rondevu point he must reach in a specific time window, that’ll help create more tension and conflict.

        Finally I agree with kjk11’s point, use “Nazi” instead of “German”.

        Good luck with this, nice idea. Hope that helped!

        Richiev Singularity Reviewed on September 20, 2013.
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          Hi,

          I immediately identified with this being Nazi related though it wouldn’t hurt to specify the fact. It’s a good idea. I like it. I’d suggest reducgint the title to simply “Hunted” but up to you

          good luck

          wilsondownunder Default Reviewed on September 21, 2013.
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