When a high school chemistry teacher struggling financially is diagnosed with cancer and health insurance wont cover the cost of treatment, he turns to cooking and selling crystal meth to secure a financial future for his family

Breaking Bad

Andrew Bates Penpusher Asked on September 6, 2012 in Examples.
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Nailed it.

nicholasandrewhalls Samurai Reviewed on September 6, 2012.
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it’s a bit long tho, isn’t it? What happened to 25 words?

When a chemistry teacher gets terminal cancer and insurance won’t cover the treatment he turns to cooking crystal meth to secure his family financially…

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Filmstar Default Reviewed on September 7, 2012.
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I don’t like ‘family financially’ tho…

When a chemistry teacher gets terminal cancer and insurance won’t cover the treatment he turns to cooking crystal meth to secure his family’s future…

I think we can get it’s about finances without stating it…can we ?

Filmstar Default Reviewed on September 7, 2012.
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Or…

When a chemistry teacher gets terminal cancer and insurance won’t cover the treatment he turns to cooking crystal meth…

(isn’t that in itself intriguing?)

Filmstar Default Reviewed on September 7, 2012.
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My original logline is long.
just refering to the above logline “he turns to cooking crystal meth” doesn’t sit right, sounds like he’s turning to drugs and not saying why…

When a chemistry teacher struggling financially is diagnosed with cancer and health insurance wont cover treatment, he turns to cooking and selling crystal meth to secure his family’s future

Andrew Bates Penpusher Reviewed on September 7, 2012.
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