When a highly-strung accountant inherits a failing community TV station, he finds unlikely performance geniuses at a small town talent competition to save the station.

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Nir Shelter Singularity Asked on August 27, 2014 in Public.
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A high strung accountant struggles to fulfill her father’s dying wish of making  a success out of  the failing community TV station he started,  but the undiscovered  superstar she stumbles on at the local talent show who’ll boost the ratings  is an impossible diva who refuses to do TV

Fma Samurai Reviewed on February 18, 2017.
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>>>he finds unlikely performance geniuses at a small town talent competition to save the station.

Doesn’t that give away the ending?

dpg Singularity Reviewed on August 28, 2014.
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Finding more unlikely (therefore cheap) talent is the action he will take to overcome the obstacle. Giving away the ending is not my concern at this stage as I’m structuring the story now not trying to sell the idea to an audience just yet.

As a story what about the logline sounds week?
Also what plot elements would you say are missing from the logline?

Thanks for the help.

Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on August 28, 2014.
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Hey guys would greatly appreciate some more feedback on this one please.

Thanks, Nir.

Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on August 29, 2014.
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The stakes are not apparent; the guy is an accountant, not a TV producer, so I’m not concerned for his livelihood should the station fail. What’s the urgency to have the community TV station succeed?

If the objective is to save the TV station, why would he choose to seek the solution at a small town talent competition? As an accountant, he’s probably familiar with the idea of throwing money at a problem until it goes away – why isn’t THIS what he tries to save the station? Or even just volunteers who WANT to work in TV? It seems pretty far down the list of options for him to seek out small town talent show entrants.

“unlikely performance geniuses” is pretty clunky. Maybe just shorten it to “quirky performers” or “unorthodox performers”?

nicholasandrewhalls Samurai Reviewed on August 29, 2014.
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