When a many-times-jilted long-distance truckie falls in love online with a city writer, he must learn to trust again, to win her heart.

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Louise Weihart Penpusher Asked on December 2, 2013 in Public.
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What’s a truckie? Just curious

Richiev Singularity Reviewed on December 2, 2013.
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truck driver

Louise Weihart Penpusher Reviewed on December 2, 2013.
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RE: “Trusting” versus “not trusting”. That seems like an internal subjective need –it pertains to the character flaw — which is fine. But is the objective goal to “trust his heart” or to get the girl?

And in addition to internal issues the guy has with his heart, what external obstacle and/or romantic competition stands in the way of relationship with the writer?

Consider these loglines for 2 movies about romance and human relationships:

YOUNG ADULT
A newly divorced writer returns to her small home-town to rekindle a romance with her ex-boyfriend, who is now happily married and has a newborn daughter.

SCOTT PILGRIM VS THE WORLD
It’s love at first sight when a 23-year-old musician glimpses a girl at a party, but before he can win her affection, he has to fight off her seven violently possessive former lovers.

The protagonists have issues of the heart to sort out, but for the purpose of the logline, the story is cast in terms of clearly visible obstacles, including romantic competition, that stand between the protagonist and the relationship they want.

What external obstacles, what romantic competition, stand between the truck driver and the relationship he wants with the writer?

dpg Singularity Reviewed on December 2, 2013.
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Hi dpg, good to hear from you πŸ™‚
As you can tell I’m still at it. Since we last spoke, I am half-way through Karel’s course and have read ‘Save the Cat’ (which I found really useful) and Syd Field’s ‘Screenplay’.

This truckie (truck driver) will have to get Sydney freight as often as possible and convince the writer to join him on a road trip – that’s the crux of the action until the midpoint. I’m still working on putting that into the logline.

Thanks so much for the response. You always get me thinking πŸ™‚

How is your work going?

Best, Louise

Louise Weihart Penpusher Reviewed on December 4, 2013.
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Hi, Louise! It’s the same ol’, same ol’ in my hemisphere of the globe, only deeper and denser.

As you know, one of the big beats in Blake Synder’s schema is the Life Changing Event. In the case of your story, I’m guessing that would be the meet-cute scene triggering their relationship. Further, for romances, a direct or indirect reference to that event is typical in the logline. So: given the vast gap between them in miles, employment and economic status, temperaments — how do they meet-cute?

Best wishes and regards.

dpg Singularity Reviewed on December 5, 2013.
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