When a newspaper reporter's dreams are haunted by a ghost, he must find her killer to stop his nightmares.

Retribution

Clint Cure Penpusher Asked on June 19, 2015 in Public.
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too vague.
what ghost?
what killer?

FFF Mentor Reviewed on June 19, 2015.
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I think you need a little more detail. How about something like this:

‘When a newspaper reporter is driven mad by dreams of the ghost of a beautiful woman, he must track down her killer and bring him/her to justice to relieve his nightmares and restore his sanity.’

Default Reviewed on June 19, 2015.
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The girls ghost. You find out who the killer is later.

Clint Cure Penpusher Reviewed on June 19, 2015.
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The newspaper reporter doesn’t add to the story at the moment, a man, works and removes unneeded detail. You now have room for detail that moves the story further action and goal.

CraigDGriffiths Overlord Reviewed on June 19, 2015.
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Why not a cop, a detective haunted,metaphorically and literally, by an unsolved murder?

dpg Singularity Reviewed on June 20, 2015.
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