When a struggling home economics teacher is diagnosed with cancer he opens a bakery to "raise the dough" and secure a financial future for his family.

Baking Bread (Skit)

Lucius Paisley Logliner Asked on November 30, 2012 in Public.
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I’m obviously not the first to come up with that particular “Spoonerism” but I have no intention of writing something like that, it’s more “practice” for my loglining…

Default Reviewed on November 30, 2012.
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I was going to say it a light hearted Breaking Bad but then read the comment and title haha. I quite like the log line but think maybe you should end on the ‘raise the dough’ line as it is the humorous part of it and it’s bogged down near the middle. That would be my suggestion.

Kriss Tolliday Default Reviewed on November 30, 2012.
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So –

‘When a struggling home economics teacher is diagnosed with cancer, he secures a financial future for his family by opening a bakery to “raise the dough”.’

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Default Reviewed on November 30, 2012.
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When a struggling meth dealer is diagnosed with cancer he converts his meth lab to a bakery. But to secure a financial future for his family he must crank out counterfeit Twinkies.

cynosurer Penpusher Reviewed on November 30, 2012.
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best reply ever.

Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on December 2, 2012.
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