When a timid janitor’s fiance is kidnapped by a fire demon, he must locate a mythical artifact and uncover its power before the devil kills his lover and unborn child

Horn of the Leviathan

Andrew Bates Penpusher Asked on September 14, 2012 in Public.
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I would capatilize Devil. Otherwise you have nailed (what I believe log lines need) the Character/Conflict/Stakes info needed to entice a reader/producer to pick up your spec. Well done.

alexmoreno Default Reviewed on September 14, 2012.
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Like it man. Much more powerful with the personal stakes and you’ve worded it very well. Nice one.

When’s it out?

Filmstar Default Reviewed on September 15, 2012.
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Thank-you

Andrew Bates Penpusher Reviewed on September 15, 2012.
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Honestly, it’s just a logline at this stage. I’ll be writing a beat sheet soon and progress from there. Once I have completed a draft etc I will contact Karel or the Shark-man to help me iron out the kinks. Months away, plenty of time to focus on the story and character arc. Cheers for all the help.

Andrew Bates Penpusher Reviewed on September 15, 2012.
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I like this logline, it’s direct and powerful. The only thing I’m left wondering if what the link is between the fire demon and the fact that the guy is a janitor. But other than that, nice work! 🙂

brookeschook Default Reviewed on September 15, 2012.
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