When an aquaphobic janitor discovers he has the ability to control water, he must overcome his fear to save his fiance from a fire manipulating madman

Horn of the Leviathan

Andrew Bates Penpusher Asked on August 30, 2012 in No Category.
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So much seems to be happening in the logline I’m not sure what the story is. How does he control water? Was he gifted and if so, why?. He’s acquaphobic (hydrophobic?). How does his water ability/fear have any relation with one who controls fire? Mentioning that your protag. is a janitor bears what on the story. Maybe re-work to read something like, “A man with the ability to control water must overcome his fear of heat to save his love from one with the talent for manipulating fire”.

Default Reviewed on August 30, 2012.
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It’s not bad. I can see the conflict and the fear. I guess the first thing to pop into my head was why a janitor? aquaphobic is that a fear of all water? I am assuming janitors use water to clean?

joyeee Default Reviewed on August 30, 2012.
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Hydrophobia (Rabies) – especially a set of symptoms of the later stages of an infection, in which the victim has difficulty swallowing, shows panic when presented with liquids to drink, and cannot quench their thirst.
An abnormal or unnatural dread of water.
Aquaphobia is a persistent and abnormal fear of water. Aquaphobia is a specific phobia that involves a level of fear that is beyond the patient’s control or that may interfere with daily life.
either one covers the phobia

Andrew Bates Penpusher Reviewed on August 31, 2012.
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His fear is water, thanks for your feedback.

Andrew Bates Penpusher Reviewed on August 31, 2012.
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Good point. To me his fear is more of having his head below water, everyday use is okay. I’ll work on some more.
I’ll play with it some more, his occupation doesn’t work well with the logline
Cheers.

Andrew Bates Penpusher Reviewed on August 31, 2012.
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