When an earthquake infests an apartment complex with fast-breeding spiders, a young entomologist's plan to save the residents means forcing a war veteran survivalist from his home.

Toilet Spiders!

Lucius Paisley Logliner Asked on January 27, 2015 in Public.
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Rewording may make the pace better. Is forcing one person from their home the main trust of the story or just one of the obstacles?

What makes forcing this person out so hard? Why do you call it out specifically in your logline?

CraigDGriffiths Overlord Reviewed on January 30, 2015.
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Rewording may make the pace better.” Suggestions?

Is forcing one person from their home the main trust of the story or just one of the obstacles?” The main objective is to save the residents, which if the entomologist does not achieve this, his plan will not work. As such, it’s a pretty important obstacle.

What makes forcing this person out so hard?” I think it’s pretty clear the entomologist can’t save the residents if one of them doesn’t want to leave.

Why do you call it out specifically…?” If the resident doesn’t leave, the plan won’t work, ergo ‘can’t save the residents’.

But as I said in the beginning, if you think rewording may make the pace better, then I am open to any and all suggestions…

Lucius Paisley Logliner Reviewed on January 30, 2015.
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What’s the genre?

dpg Singularity Reviewed on January 31, 2015.
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“Coming of Age” / thriller

Lucius Paisley Logliner Reviewed on February 1, 2015.
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Coming of Age? He’s a precocious kid, has already gotten his degree in entomology while still only a teenager?

(My understanding of the ‘coming of age’ genre is that it spans the teen years.)

dpg Singularity Reviewed on February 1, 2015.
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