“When an inexperienced journalist gets assigned to a military unit fighting in the second US civil war, he will have to fill the unlikely role of diplomat in order to prevent the war from reaching his home town.”

The Bio-Drone War

Shadow Penpusher Asked on May 1, 2015 in Public.
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The circumstances — a 2nd American Civil War — seems more interesting than the journalist’s predicament.

dpg Singularity Reviewed on May 1, 2015.
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I like the idea sounds very cool.

When the whole country is at war. How do you give the home town higher stakes.

Houston Chorley Penpusher Reviewed on May 1, 2015.
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To Chorley and dpg,

The second US civil war has been waged for many years at this point, so I think everyone would be pretty used to it as it’s a common part of everyday life. The two sides in the war have been at a stalemate for a very long time, until one side gets an huge advantage and proceeds to push up the front line. The journalist’s town is in the path of the advancing military.

Some of the conflict comes from the fact that the journalist’s superiors want him to give a very biased account of the war, due to the heavy propaganda of the time, but in order to save his town he has to play the role of unbiased diplomat and get both sides to stop the fighting long enough to evacuate the town.

( Thanks for the comments! )

Shadow Penpusher Reviewed on May 1, 2015.
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>>> so I think everyone would be pretty used to it as it’s a common part of everyday life

For the characters. But not to anyone reading the logline, not to the potential viewing audience.

The logline raises the question: what was the casus belli? It may be backstory but doesn’t it figure into the current situation and the ensuing plot?

dpg Singularity Reviewed on May 1, 2015.
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Yeah, I wasn’t sure how much back story to put in the logline because I tried to keep it short and interesting. I’m thinking the war could possibly have been caused by a federal military strike on numerous cities in a certain state in the name of combating a “terrorist organization”, however the governor of that state believes they crossed a line and summons the national guard to defend the state. This escalates into a civil war, with states choosing sides with either the Catalysts (federal gov supporting) or the Reactionaries (state-supporting).

Personally I don’t think I need to include background of the war in this particular logline, but I’m open to suggestions! 🙂

Shadow Penpusher Reviewed on May 2, 2015.
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