When her prison transport plane crashes, a lawyer wrongfully accused of fraud, must avoid the FBI and escape from the vengeful husband who framed her to realize her dream.

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Leon Davis Logliner Asked on August 28, 2014 in Public.
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In my mind better to re post a new version of a logline under the same original posted comments.

Realizing her dream seams unrelated to the plot at hand if she is escaping her husband and trying to prove her innocence.

As previously mentioned this is very similar to The Fugitive but instead of only law enforcement after the MC it’s the spouse as well.

It seams like the stakes are not high enough if the husband framed her of fraud what will he do if he catches her again? Frame her for tax evasion? But if he were to try and kill her or someone she loves then the stakes would be primal and clearer to anyone reading the logline.

Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on August 28, 2014.
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Realize her dream (What dream) doesn’t really help the logline. Here is the logline without that line.

“When her prison transport plane crashes, a lawyer wrongfully accused of fraud, must avoid the FBI and escape from the vengeful husband who framed her.”

Richiev Singularity Reviewed on August 28, 2014.
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First of all, I don’t know what you mean by ‘prison transport plane’. Is she being transported to or from the prison, or between prisons? Is she going there in the capacity as a lawyer or as a prisoner? I’m confused by the event that sets your story into motion.

You MUST be less vague about the protagonist’s goal. I don’t know what “realize the dream” looks like, so I can’t visualise what type of movie you’re thinking about writing / making, nor do I see what your character is going to do for the middle hour or so of the movie (aside from avoid the authorities). What is the objective?

nicholasandrewhalls Samurai Reviewed on August 29, 2014.
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Thanks for your time again.
Can you tell me where to post the updated version?

Leon Davis Logliner Reviewed on August 29, 2014.
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Just re post an updated logline under the same conversation of the original post. Other wise it’s counter productive and hogs the board.

Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on August 29, 2014.
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