When her younger sister get selected to compete from their districts, the caring big sister voluntarily gets into a struggle between life and death. /Julia from Stellas Account

StellaAurora Logliner Asked on October 16, 2015 in Examples.

A little too vague for me, and doesn’t really pique my interest.  What district, school district?  Compete at what, arm wrestling?  I would recommend that you add some details.

on November 4, 2015.
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In a dystopian future, a girl volunteers to take her sister’s place in the annual “reaping” of randomnly chosen youths by a totalitarian government for a gladiatorial fight to the death. (31 words)
–The  Hunger Games

dpg Singularity Reviewed on October 16, 2015.
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I agree with the logline being too vague. We’re not made aware of what these districts are or what the competition is. Also, what are the stakes? You vaguely touch on life and death but not enough to really pique interstate or do justice to the story. It’s a great jumping off point though.

FinnDarcy Penpusher Reviewed on January 23, 2016.
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