When his bride loses her memory of him a week before the wedding, an unromantic guy's guy must restore it by recreating their courtship’s most romantic moments or face losing the love of his life.

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sloanpeterson Samurai Asked on May 23, 2015 in Public.
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What sort of amnesia?

* Anterograde amnesia
* Retrograde amnesia
* Post-traumatic amnesia
* Dissociative amnesia
* Lacunar amnesia

Controlling when someone is getting his/her memory back is stuff for movies, it’s not reality. You can’t predict how long it takes for someone to get his/her memory back, even if you help faith a bit..

But I would say to this guy’s guy: Good luck!!

Rutger Oosterhoff Samurai Reviewed on May 23, 2015.
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Hello,
this is a pretty good logline!
There’s irony (a guy’s guy who need to repeat his romantic moments),
an inciting event (the amnesia), a clear goal (to marry the girl).
There’s a plan too: recreate their romantic moments- will it work? or not? that’s interesting.

I recommend to find a better title whit some irony in it.

I don’t have problems with the realism or unrealism of the amnesia- it’s a comedy right?
Have you seen the horrible movie where Harrison Ford loose his memory and his wife become a stranger to him? Try to avoid the same errors 🙂

You can improve your logline with a little rewriting to have a better writing style, making it even shorter and funnier. I would avoid ‘unromantic’ for 2 reasons: 1st, it’s implicit in “guy’s guy”, 2nd, you say he had romantic moments so it’s a bit confusing. I suggest to change “face loosing” with just “loosing”.

Good luck,

FFF Mentor Reviewed on May 23, 2015.
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What Rutger said.

What we now know about how the brain creates — and loses — memories it’s not credible that he can restore her memories by repeating past actions and events. What’s lost is lost irretrievably; he’s got to start all over again.

dpg Singularity Reviewed on May 23, 2015.
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I did some research before writing the script and settled on retrograde amnesia. The MD in the script makes it clear that you can try to help it return, but there is no guarantee. This wording may need to be changed. Thanks.

Default Reviewed on May 23, 2015.
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Good point made by DPG he needs to start over again only the clock is ticking this time round.
i.e:
After his bride loses her memory a week before their wedding, a guy’s guy must successfully propose again by recreating their courtship’s most romantic moments before the ceremony.

I would try to introduce an antagonist such as a crazy ex boyfriend the bride had who tries to take advantage of her memory lose.

Hope this helps.

Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on May 23, 2015.
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