When Jacob, a genteel theater actor, becomes a mob boss through mistaken identity. He is forced to work with Mia a police detective, in order to incarcerate the notorious Big Bamzy and save his own life. This is a logline for the narrative of a 10 episode TV comedy series.

‘Tough House’.

Nir Shelter Singularity Asked on August 24, 2013 in Public.
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Drop the when, it’s not needed, and makes the first sentance ready funky. Unless you add a comma after identity, and lowercase the h in he. Don;t take this the wrong way, this idea has been done time-and-time again. Maybe think of a twist to incoperate, and seperate yours from the rest.

Judah Ray Logliner Reviewed on February 1, 2017.
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Thought I’d mention that the last sentence is not part of the logline and was mistakenly pasted with the logline submission but I only realized after submitting it.
Thanks Nir.

Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on August 24, 2013.
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Names are not necessary.
When a genteel theater actor becomes a mob boss through mistaken identity, he is forced to work with a female police detective in order to incarcerate the real criminal and save his own life

JanCabal Logliner Reviewed on August 24, 2013.
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When a genteel actor is mistaken for a mob boss, he must work with the police to incarcerate the real mobster and save his life.

dpg Singularity Reviewed on August 25, 2013.
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Very cool, my suggestion is to make the detective memorable with a one word descriptor: sexy, one-eyed, Amazonian, super-model, you know, interesting!

MichaelHag Penpusher Reviewed on August 25, 2013.
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