When naive but not stupid pizza master realized that he inherited a Mafia don, must confront the heads of the other families in order to bring the family business into legal channels.



    babaroga Penpusher Asked on September 17, 2015 in Comedy.
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      “When naive pizza master inherited a Mafia don, he must confront the ‘family’ to clean the business.”

      I like the title.

      FFF Mentor Reviewed on September 17, 2015.
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        I think this story has potential,
        maybe the main character is the secret son of a very respectable mafia boss, so he’s kind of untouchable even if he opposes to mafia systems. Maybe at the beginning he is helped by mafia (by illegal means) and when he asks to be let alone he’ll learn it’s so much difficult to run a legal business.

        FFF Mentor Reviewed on September 17, 2015.
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          Hi Babaroga,

          Cool concept!

          What do you mean by “confront the heads of the other families”?

          I am assuming that the conflict in this story drives from the fact that once you’re in the Mafia, you can’t get out.

          And this is exactly what the pizza master wants to do, right?

          On a side note, I noticed that you have posted quote a few loglines, but only just as many reviews.

          May I ask you kindly to keep the ration loglines/reviews to 1/2, or close to that? Thanks!



          Karel Segers Samurai Reviewed on September 28, 2015.
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            Thank you Karel.

            babaroga Penpusher Reviewed on November 15, 2015.
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