When new clues from the diary of her long lost brother, help a young woman to solve a riddle of decades old crime, she is compelled to go to Siberia in search for her vanished family and a missing treasure.

Corridor One

corridorone Penpusher Asked on August 29, 2015 in Public.
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This logline does not reveal any conflict, inner or outer. Is there an antagonist or something she must fight against.

hospas Penpusher Reviewed on May 1, 2016.
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Why not roll it all up into one: she has to go to Siberia to solve the murder, too? (Nowhere is it written and rarely is it done that an adaptation must be slavishly faithful to the source material.)

dpg Singularity Reviewed on August 29, 2015.
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Hi dpg,
You see, when I wrote my book ‘Corridor One’ my goal was to write good mystery and adventure book without dead body on a second page, without ‘ketchup’ and noise of the shattered bones. I think I succeeded. Same I would like to achieve in my movie. In my second book I’m writing ‘Corridor Two’ I may introduce more antagonism and more action, but it will be in an intelligent and in an intriguing way. I may be wrong but it is my style and my view. Let somebody else murder, robe, rape and run from authorities. OMO Thank you and hope to hear from you soon.

corridorone Penpusher Reviewed on August 29, 2015.
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The problem I have with this logline is that I don’t comprehend the causal relationship between clues that help her to solve the murder and the trip to Siberia, how the former is the inciting incident for the latter.

And I shouldn’t have to read the book, or a synopsis, to figure that out.

dpg Singularity Reviewed on August 29, 2015.
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Hi dpg,
OK i got it. It will be hard to explain in one sentence since the story is complicated and twisted. By giving up the link about her brother diary, old unsolved crime and what motivated her to go to Siberia I may give up all the ‘meat’ of the story. Interesting – how to do it without? Need more experience and trying. Looking forward to hear any advice or examples 🙂

corridorone Penpusher Reviewed on August 29, 2015.
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