When the Imperial head chef is beheaded for serving uninventive dishes, the sous chef must obtain a magic cookbook in order to execute a dish pleasing to the Emperor before he and his staff are beheaded.

    The Emperor’s Last Chef

    andrewclau Logliner Asked on October 8, 2013 in Public.
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      You could shorten your logline by telling: The chef must obtain a magic cookbook to execute a dish pleasing to the emperor or else he and his entire staff will be beheaded

      Francois Thoolen Default Reviewed on October 9, 2013.
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        Hi Francois, thanks for volunteering your opinion. I agree with you that the logline is long, however your solution removes the inciting incident from the logline entirely – and loglines need to have inciting incidents. 🙂 I’m also missing a flaw for my hero so will need to rework this in.

        andrewclau Logliner Reviewed on October 9, 2013.
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          Andrewclau:

          Why must the dramatic problem be solved through magic? Why not through character? That is, rather than find the winning recipe in a magic cookbook, the sous chef has to find the winning recipe from within himself, develop the skill and confidence to create the dish.

          What makes Remy the rat in the Pixar animation film, “Ratatouille” so appealing? Because he can follow a a magical recipe? No it’s because, like all great chefs, he doesn’t slavishly follow instructions; rather he follows his gut instincts, his palate; he relies on his intuition, on his experience.

          dpg Singularity Reviewed on October 9, 2013.
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            Hi dpg, I agree with you. I was trying to include an intriguing external goal to imply an exciting outer journey in which the sous-chef would get out of the Imperial palace and into culinary action/adventures. My intention is to have the sous-chef pressured to come up with the life saving dish/dishes himself after, finding the “magic book” and realizing that it’s a hoax. Maybe even dropping this towards the end of the second act.

            I struggled to keep the logline shorter but it would have read something like this:

            When the Imperial Kitchen Chief is beheaded for serving uninventive dishes, his under-confident protege must obtain a magic cookbook in order to execute a dish pleasing to the Emperor. But when he discovers the magic cookbook is a hoax he and his staff must come up with something truly tasty before they are all beheaded.

            Your thoughts?

            andrewclau Logliner Reviewed on October 9, 2013.
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