When the passionate brother of the bland man she is engaged to marry falls madly in love with her, a woman must decide which man is right for her.

dpg Singularity Asked on October 2, 2015 in Examples.

For the popular romantic movie “Moonstruck”  (1987).  29 words

“Must decide”?  How often have I dinged other loglines for outlining a plot where the character must decide to do something!  Isn’t a logline supposed to be about what happens after a character decides?

But  I don’t see any other way of characterizing the story arc of Loretta, the main character. This is a romance, a story about relationships, where what is usually the complementary “B” story in other genres  is the central story around which all the action pivots.  

Loretta is trapped between 2 brothers, the bland one she agrees to marry, the passionate one who falls in love with her — and she with him.  She has to choose between her head and heart, between her superstitious fear of bad luck and taking a risk for true love.

on October 2, 2015.
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I agree with dpk. Initially reading your logline left a lot to be desired.

AntSivik Penpusher Reviewed on October 3, 2015.
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It’s true about romance stories being mostly about the decision to either follow the heart or the head, however I firmly believe that in most good love stories a goal awaits the characters beyond the mere decision it self.

I haven’t seen Moonstruck (you’re on to me romance isn’t my genre…), is there a consequence established as a result of either choice she makes? Also is there a B story separate to the love interests?

Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on October 5, 2015.
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” When an older brother’s bride-in-waiting falls passionately in love with the rebellious younger brother, an Italian-American family finds itself in on the verge of a crisis”.

kbfilmworks Samurai Reviewed on October 6, 2015.
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“When an older man’s young bride-in-waiting falls passionately in love with his rebellious younger brother, an Italian-American family finds itself on the verge of a crisis”.

kbfilmworks Samurai Reviewed on October 6, 2015.
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Nir Shelter;

The consequence of her decision – – and she doesn’t decide until the 3rd Act — is whether she’s going to risk finding happiness a marriage with an exciting  man or settle for a safe but unhappy  marriage with a dull one.

As kbfilmwork alludes to, the dilemma she finds herself in throws the whole family into crisis because (among other things) it leads to Loretta finding out about her father’s affair.  So there comes a moment of reckoning, of truth not only for Loretta in terms of her true feelings, but also for her mother and father.

It seems to me that the story line for a logline for romances doesn’t always — not saying never — conform to the standard formula  applicable for most other genres.  For example, I would offer in exhibit of the dominance of the “B” story over any “A” story is “When Harry Met Sally”.  I have seen it argued in other web precincts devoted to film structure that “When Harry Met Sally”,  doesn’t have a plot, at least not a conventional plot, the kind we are supposed to hammer our stories into for the standard issue logline.  And this is one of the great romantic films — I can’t argue with success.  I can only try to figure out why it seems to break the rule with wonderful impunity.

To be continued when I get around to posting my version of a logline for that film. If someone else doesn’t first…

dpg Singularity Reviewed on October 6, 2015.

Good point, funny and or romantic moments can hold an audiences’ interest if done superbly well.

Romance stories may be harder to logline because the logline needs to describe the A plot (the love story) and unlike other genres also needs to describe in detail the B plot.

on October 8, 2015.
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